One Day - a poem

[GrowUpDeep]

ONE DAY

If the guillotine’s bladey thirst
Be unquenched by martyr’s blood
Or if fires bellow for chains…
And kindling…
And a melancholy wind

Oh the wind can be so melancholy

If the palms of wickedness
Rub hot with hostility…
And strategy
Or if we see love turn to wax
Before our breaking eyes

Oh our wounded soul.., look away

See beyond the storm
Of this great stage
And nestle in beneath His wings
Where He lifts our chin to see His face
And we let go of fear forever

Oh how beautiful the gates of Glory

[GrowUpDeep]

No comments?

[RefinedbyFire]

I really think your poem is really neat and dramatic (like your avatar)! I like the tiered structure of it, and I like your choice of words and terms.

P.S. I'm laughing at your bold "No comments?" line. People in general are not that complimentary, and not everybody has the gift of encouragement. So, please don't feel let down. Just write it for the Lord's glory!

[GrowUpDeep]

Just write it for the Lord's glory!

:hug I used to write secular poetry - some of my stuff can still be found if googled (I will be glad when it's all gone) I have determined that If I write again it would be for the Lord's glory. It's much harder for some reason. I do appreciate your encouragement...

[RefinedbyFire]

^You know, I thought you seemed professional, because I was examining your poem, and I felt you must have more in-depth experience with writing. I have a relative that is excellent at poetry, too! You know, at old bookstores, I sometimes find these old books called "Ideals" filled with pictures, writings, and poems, and it would be cool if there was a modern Christian publication like that, that you could send in your poems. There are different outlets you could look into. Just pray about it! Take all your requests before Him, who loves you and knows you intimately...

On these boards, the reality is, these sections are quieter, and you aren't probably going to find a lot of feedback. However, we all need encouragement and feedback now and then. But, ultimately, do everything to the glory of Him alone -- the Lord, our Savior. The Gospels talk about the loss in seeking the praise of men...

[GrowUpDeep]

^You know, I thought you seemed professional, because I was examining your poem, and I felt you must have more in-depth experience with writing. I have a relative that is excellent at poetry, too! You know, at old bookstores, I sometimes find these old books called "Ideals" filled with pictures, writings, and poems, and it would be cool if there was a modern Christian publication like that, that you could send in your poems. There are different outlets you could look into. Just pray about it! Take all your requests before Him, who loves you and knows you intimately...

On these boards, the reality is, these sections are quieter, and you aren't probably going to find a lot of feedback. However, we all need encouragement and feedback now and then. But, ultimately, do everything to the glory of Him alone -- the Lord, our Savior. The Gospels talk about the loss in seeking the praise of men...

You are very gracious... excellent advice too :)